SFFS 28/09/2013

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Wow, do we have a busy schedule this week! But it’s awesome to see you all back.

I’ve recently been posting from a sketch called Fear, and I thought I’d carry right on with it this week. I may not post too many more snippets from this sketch, though, as I’m itching to put it live. Still need to decide how and where I’ll be doing that.

In this snippet, Kate’s just snuck under the window ledge to hopefully keep away from any bullets that may stray indoors.

Not daring to look outside, she ransacked her brain for a safe hiding place. They would surely search the house.

… KATE …

The lounge at the far end; the windows were barred, and the door could be locked. Retracing her route back through the kitchen, and moving as fast as possible, she headed there, keeping quiet and low.

Reaching the room, she closed the door and locked it. She was safer, but she wasn’t about to enumerate her chickens. Then she turned to look around. There was a barred window in the north wall, the closely-meshed iron bars only preventing quick entry. To her dismay, the only piece of furniture was an upturned couch in the middle of the room.

Please tell me what your thoughts are, and then head over to the SFFS blog to read snippets from the other fab authors who take part in this ring!


About Laurel C Kriegler

A born and bred South African, I was educated at Rhodes University in Grahamstown, South Africa, where I graduated with an Honours Degree (post-graduate) in Economics at the end of 2001. After spending several years gaining work experience in the UK, I returned to South Africa to get married. It was during the ensuing period that my pursuits of writing and editing took hold.
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12 Responses to SFFS 28/09/2013

  1. I’m commenting early, Laurel, because I’m traveling tomorrow–Cary Caffrey’s calling me a cheater, but we all know what Caffrey’s about. πŸ˜‰

    Wonderful mood in this piece! Good tension and pacing.


  2. Peter Vialls says:

    Hi Laurel! This is a good snippet – this is a very effective nightmare/dreamland sequence. I’m glad my dreams aren’t as real as this!


  3. T. M. Hunter says:

    Always tough to find a hiding space…and then one with barred windows? Eek. πŸ™‚


  4. Yes, pre-numeration of chickens is never to be advised! Great snip.


  5. tktoppin says:

    Urgg! Don’t you just hate not having any place good to hide. That’s usually me in days gone by during childhood games of hide and seek. Yep, I always got the sucky spots. Great snippet, loved the growing tension!


  6. Tara Quan says:

    Loved the snippet This story definitely needs to go live somewhere so I can read the whole thing :).


  7. Definite nightmare feel. What’s the significance of her name in the middle of the snippet?


  8. Definitely got a nightmare vibe from this one. Wake up, Kate!


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