SFFS 15/05/2015

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Hi all! It’s been a while since I actually participated in sharing a snippet. While I’m not currently writing due to numerous reading commitments (yeah, I actually do have those), I recently wrote a few scenes for some of my stories. This week I want to take you into the world of Takeover Bid. In the story, our hero (Terren) and heroine (Layni) meet on board the Nuren, a massive interplanetary cruiser. In this snippet, I want to give you a glimpse of the interior of the ship. I’m not ashamed to confess there’s heavy influence from Asimov and McCaffrey in this.

He exited the cabin and set off for the Cranz Lounge. Over the years he’d somehow managed to spend many trips on board the Nuren, and one of the mainstays was Frelix Mantuso, the maître d’ of the Cranz Lounge. Not to mention that the food was the best he’d tasted in the galaxy.

Terren caught the grav lift up ten decks. When he stepped out, he was in the main expressway concourse. Running an oval around the ship, the expressway consisted of moving bands set into a slightly raised portion of the floor. The ones on the outer edges moved slower than the ones in the centre. One could use it to reach the different zones of the ship in relatively little time. The zone where the Cranz Lounge could be found was on the opposite side of the oval from where Terren stood.

The expressway was quiet, so he stepped onto the outer, slow-moving band of the expressway. One could walk at a faster pace than the speed at which the band moved, so he moved through two other bands – each at comparatively faster speeds – to the central band, which moved the fastest. About five minutes later, he stepped off the fast band and hastily made his way off the expressway. Grav lift doors greeted him, and he took one going up fifteen decks.

From there it was a short walk to the Cranz Lounge. And he’d barely stepped in the entrance before he was engulfed in a bear hug.

Thank you for stopping by for this glimpse of the Nuren. We will hopefully get to know Frelix a bit better next week.

Before you go, please pause a bit and let me know your impressions of this snippet. And then don’t forget to see the snippets shared by the other SFFS participants.


About Laurel C Kriegler

A born and bred South African, I was educated at Rhodes University in Grahamstown, South Africa, where I graduated with an Honours Degree (post-graduate) in Economics at the end of 2001. After spending several years gaining work experience in the UK, I returned to South Africa to get married. It was during the ensuing period that my pursuits of writing and editing took hold.
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8 Responses to SFFS 15/05/2015

  1. Anita says:

    is this all? where can i get more?????


  2. Good details in the description. I’d love to try grav lift!


  3. Peter Vialls says:

    No need to be ashamed of your influences – good choices in both cases. And this reads well – I can ‘see’ the scene clearly. I’ll look forward to seeing some more next week!


  4. Ed Hoornaert says:

    I definitely see some Heinlein in here, too — The Roads Must Roll, one of the all time great stories.


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